Homework
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Writing Task: Who do you think has life easier, girls or guys?
I think girls has life easier than guys. The biggest thing is not enlisting in army. I think It\'s very unfair. Korea is separate country and It has possibility that war happens. So, I agree that young people have duty to do military service. But, I can\'t understand why girls don\'t do military services. There are many other countries that women also have duty to do military service. My female friends go forward 2 years earlier, just because i am a man in korea. To be fair, Women have to enlist in an army or Guys have to get a choice whether to do service.
강사 첨삭
Hello there Jay! Thank you for stating your opinions about this topic. Good job!
Until the next one!
See you in class! ^_^
~Teacher Sheila :)
>>I think girls have life easier than guys.
The biggest thing is not enlisting in army.
>>CORRECT
I think It\'s very unfair. Korea is separate country and It has possibility that war happens.
>>I think, it\'s very unfair, Korea is a separate country and it\'s possible that war happens.
So, I agree that young people have duty to do military service.
>>So, I agree that young people have to do a duty to do military service.
But, I can\'t understand why girls don\'t do military services.
>>CORRECT
There are many other countries that women also have duty to do military service.
>>There are many countries that women also have a duty to do military service.
My female friends go forward 2 years earlier, just because i am a man in korea.
>>My female friends go forward 2 years earlier just because I am a man in Korea.
To be fair, Women have to enlist in an army or Guys have to get a choice whether to do service.
>>To be fair, women have to enlist in the army or guys have to get a choice whether to do the service.
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