Homework
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Writing Task: What would people think of two women involved in a fistfight? Make a short essay about this.
I think they are very childish. If they do a fistfight, There is no advantage. Of course, they could have understandable reason causing fight. But, the problem is that they fight with fist. If they are not children, They have to do it with conversation.They didn\'t control their emotions. The harder the problem to solve, The more we have to be rational. Then, they could reach an agreement. And if people do a fistfight, they be likely to become more emotional. So, They would not listen to other people\'s saying. It\'s hard to get a help from other people. So, We have to learn how to be calm when the situation makes us very angry
강사 첨삭
Hi Jay! It seems that you were motivated when you were doing this homework. :D
Until the next one!
See you in class! ^_^
~Teacher Sheila
>>CORRECT
If they do a fistfight, There is no advantage.
>>If they do a fistfight, there is no advantage.
Of course, they could have understandable reason causing fight.
>>Of course, they may have understandable reasons causing the fight.
But, the problem is that they fight with fist.
>>CORRECT
OR>>But the problem is that they fight using their fist.
If they are not children, They have to do it with conversation.
>>If they are not children, they have to do it with a dialogue.
OR>>If they are not children, they should communicate about it.
They didn\'t control their emotions.
>>CORRECT
The harder the problem to solve, The more we have to be rational.
>>The harder the problem to solve, the more we have to be rational.
Then, they could reach an agreement.
>>CORRECT
And if people do a fistfight, they be likely to become more emotional.
>>And, if people do a fistfight, they are likely to become more emotional.
OR>>And if people fight with their fist, they are likely to become more emotional.
So, They would not listen to other people\'s saying.
>>So, they would not listen to what other people are saying.
It\'s hard to get a help from other people.
>>It\'s hard to get help from other people.
So, We have to learn how to be calm when the situation makes us very angry
>>So, we have to learn how to be calm when the situation makes us very angry.
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