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학생이 쓴 원문
I think both of genders should be treated equally. In old days, we had Confucian ideas in Korea. So, almost all things had been limited for women. It was very inappropriate. Nowadays, it is alleviated a lot. But, I think the problem is that some Korean women feel victim mentality. They are crossing a line. They claim too many things. and almost all of them are very ridiculous. The more time passes, The more women accompany that flow. I think it needs to be fixed. They have to think about it on behalf of guys.
강사 첨삭
Hi Jay! I don\'t know Jay but almost all your points are somewhat true but I\'m not saying that it is just true in Korea but also in the whole world. So, this happens not just in Korea but also in other countries like mine. :D
Until the next one!
See you in class! ^_^
~Teacher Sheila
>>CORRECT
In old days, we had Confucian ideas in Korea.
>>In the old days, we had Confucian ideas in Korea.
So, almost all things had been limited for women.
>>CORRECT
OR>>So, almost all things had been limited to women.
It was very inappropriate.
>>CORRECT
Nowadays, it is alleviated a lot.
>>Nowadays, it has alleviated a lot.
But, I think the problem is that some Korean women feel victim mentality.
>>CORRECT
OR>>But, I think the problem is that some Korean women have victim mentality.
They are crossing a line.
>>CORRECT
They claim too many things. and almost all of them are very ridiculous.
>>They claim too many things and almost all of them are very ridiculous.
The more time passes, The more women accompany that flow.
OR>>The more time passes, the more women go to that flow.
I think it needs to be fixed.
>>CORRECT
They have to think about it on behalf of guys.
>>CORRECT
OR>>They have to think about it on behalf of everyone.
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