Homework

Hello Jimmy!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great… ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:

I want to live in another country if I can. 

>> I would want to live in another country if I can.

If possible, I also think it will be okay to emigrate. 

>> If it is possible, I also think it will be okay to emigrate.

There are several reasons but one of the biggest reasons is the fine dust. 

>> There are several reasons why, but one of the two biggest reasons is the fine dust. 

I am raising two children and I don\'t want them to grow up in the fine dust. 

>> I am raising two children and I don\'t want them to grow up in an environment with fine dust. 

The second biggest is the fact that children in my country face too much competition in their school days. 

>> The second biggest reason is the fact that the children in my country face too much competition in their schools. 

They\'ve got to go to private institutes to study almost all subjects because they need better grades for the admission of good universities.

>> They\'ve got to go to private institutes to study almost all of the subjects because they need better grades for them to be admitted to good universities.
Life in Korea is pretty tiring.

>> CORRECT!

OR

>> Life in Korea is exhausting.