Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Writing Task: If one song were to describe your life, what song would it be? Make a short essay about this.
I think My self(Post Malone) describes my life. i want to live for the rest of my life based on this song\'s lyrics. This song means that i don\'t need to care about others. I have to focus on my life. But, it\'s not easy to focus on myself. There are too many interruptions. These days, Phone is the interruption for me. It\'s so stimulating that i can\'t realize that i\'m obsessed by it. And this song reminds me that kinds of thinking. Plus, it is good itself. it has good melody. so it\'s very addictive.
강사 첨삭
Hi there Jay! You did an amazing job in your homework. I will try to listen to this song. :)
Until the next one!
See you in class! ^_^
~Teacher Sheila
>>I think the song \"Myself\" by Post Malone describes my life.
i want to live for the rest of my life based on this song\'s lyrics.
>>I want to live for the rest of my life based on this song\'s lyrics.
This song means that i don\'t need to care about others.
>>This song means that I don\'t need to care about others.
I have to focus on my life.
>>CORRECT
But, it\'s not easy to focus on myself.
>>CORRECT
There are too many interruptions.
>>CORRECT
These days, Phone is the interruption for me.
>>These days, phone is the interruption for me.
OR>>These days, my smartphone disturbs me the most.
It\'s so stimulating that i can\'t realize that i\'m obsessed by it.
>>It\'s so stimulating that I don\'t realize that I\'m obsessed by it.
And this song reminds me that kinds of thinking.
>>And this song reminds me that kind of thinking.
Plus, it is good itself.
>>CORRECT
it has good melody. so it\'s very addictive.
>>It has a good melody so it\'s very addictive.
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