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How do we resolve global warning in your opinion?
Business owners always consider how to reduce expense, and they already knew the easiest way is to reduce manpower owing to cut monthly pay.
>>Business owners always consider how they can reduce the expenses, and they already know that the easiest way is to reduce the manpower which cuts down the monthly pay.
This phenomenon makes automation system and industrialization.
>>This phenomenon gave birth to the automation system and the emergence of industrialization.
After people built up a lot of factories instead of plant trees, there are plenty of smoke, fumes, and dust on the air.
>>After people built a lot of factories but failed to plant trees, it created plenty of smokes or fumes, including dusts in the air.
Even if all president of each country make an agreement to give the factory owner a huge penalty when they make air pollution, some of them can not follow that rule especially China.
>>Even if all of the presidents of the different countries in the world will draft an agreement to give the factory owners a huge penalty when they cause air pollution, some of them cannot follow this rule, especially China.
(They do not consider about environment, so they make plant with poor technology for the nature. Thus, Korea, Taiwan, Hongkong where are near China are covered by nano dust.)
>>(They do not consider the environment, so they build plants using poor technologies that harm the nature. Thus, Korea, Taiwan and Hongkong, which are near China, have been covered with nano dusts.)
I know there is no end regarding greed of human.
>>I know that there is no end to the greed of humans.
Thus, even if China followed rule well, the other country probably will have broken the thing.
>>Thus, even if China will follow this rule well, the other countries will probably break it.
So there is only way to solve the problem is all the people leave this planet.
>>So, there is only one way to solve the problem, if the whole human race will leave this planet.
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