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I\'m going to tell you about my favorite fictional character, Tony Stark , also known as Iron Man. There are a lots of reasons why i decide this character. first of all, he has a huge money. he is rich and boss in the stark industry. and he has a pretty good body even he is quite old. however, The most important thing is that he protected the Earth from aliens. he is hero. Although he has a strange personality, he has a lots of friends who are also hero such as Hulk, Thor, Captain America and so on. so, if i can be some character, i would like to be Tony Stark lol.
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>> Correct.
There are a lots of reasons why i decide this character.
>> There are a lots of reasons why I decided to like this character.
first of all, he has a huge money. he is rich and boss in the stark industry.
>> First of all, he has a huge amount of money in the bank. He is a rich boss of Stark company.
and he has a pretty good body even he is quite old.
>> And he has a pretty good body even if he is quite old.
however, The most important thing is that he protected the Earth from aliens. he is hero.
>> However, the most important thing is that he protected earth from aliens. He is a hero.
Although he has a strange personality, he has a lots of friends who are also hero such as Hulk, Thor, Captain America and so on.
>> Although he has a strange personality, he has a lot of friends who are also heroes like him. Hulk, Thor, Captain America and the others are his friends.
so, if i can be some character, i would like to be Tony Stark lol.
>> So, if i can be a character, I would like to be Tony Stark lol.파워잉글리쉬 영어첨삭교정 서비스에 실제로 접수된 글입니다. 작성자와 글에 등장하는 사람·회사 이름, 연락처 등 개인을 알아볼 수 있는 정보는 모두 지웠습니다. 문법 오류는 학습 자료로서의 가치를 위해 원문 그대로 두었습니다.