Homework
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I don\'pay much attention to fashion in the way I dress.
>>I don\'t pay much attention to fashion in the way I dress.
Fashion means something that changes repidly to me.
>> Fashion means something that changes rapidly to me.
I believe fashion allow people to express their individuality.
>>CORRECT!
Fashion comprise different kinds of style.
>>CORRECT!
Through fashion, people can get the idea of how express themselves.
>>Through fashion, people can get the idea of how to express themselves.
Fashion doesn\'t necessarily compel people to conform.
>>CORRECT!
However, it can affect people to dress in a specific style.
>>CORRECT!
>>Moreover, it affects people
One way to see the flow of fashion is fashion shows.
>>CORRECT!
There are argues about whether fasion shows are to sell clothes or they are simply a method of advertising the designer\'s name.
>>There are argues about whether fashion shows are to sell clothes or they are simply a method of advertising the designer\'s name.
I think the purpose of fasuon shows are neither.
>> I think the purpose of fashion shows are neither.
>>Neither are the purpose.
You\'ve probably heard of the phrase \'fasion is art\'.
>>You\'ve probably heard of the phrase \'fashion is art\'.
What you see in a fashion show isn\'t on sale the very next day.
>>CORRECT!
I think fasion show\'s purpose is to show a designer\'s aesthtic, mood, a feeling or a perspective.
>>I think fashion show\'s purpose is to show a designer\'s aesthetic emotions , a feeling or a perspective.
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