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2019-11-08 · 첨삭 강사 Lucy

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I don\'pay much attention to fashion in the way I dress. Fashion means something that changes repidly to me. I believe fashion allow people to express their individuality. Fashion comprise different kinds of style. Through fashion, people can get the idea of how express themselves. Fashion doesn\'t necessarily compel people to conform. However, it can affect people to dress in a specific style. One way to see the flow of fashion is fashion shows. There are argues about whether fasion shows are to sell clothes or they are simply a method of advertising the designer\'s name. I think the purpose of fasuon shows are neither. You\'ve probably heard of the phrase \'fasion is art\'. What you see in a fashion show isn\'t on sale the very next day. I think fasion show\'s purpose is to show a designer\'s aesthtic, mood, a feeling or a perspective.

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~Teacher Lucy


I don\'pay much attention to fashion in the way I dress.

>>I don\'t pay much attention to fashion in the way I dress.


 Fashion means something that changes repidly to me.

>> Fashion means something that changes rapidly to me.


I believe fashion allow people to express their individuality.

>>CORRECT!


Fashion comprise different kinds of style.

>>CORRECT!


Through fashion, people can get the idea of how express themselves.

>>Through fashion, people can get the idea of how to express themselves.


 Fashion doesn\'t necessarily compel people to conform.

>>CORRECT!


However, it can affect people to dress in a specific style.

>>CORRECT!

>>Moreover, it affects people


 One way to see the flow of fashion is fashion shows.

>>CORRECT!


 There are argues about whether fasion shows are to sell clothes or they are simply a method of advertising the designer\'s name.

>>There are argues about whether fashion shows are to sell clothes or they are simply a method of advertising the designer\'s name.


 I think the purpose of fasuon shows are neither.

>> I think the purpose of fashion shows are neither.

>>Neither are the purpose.


 You\'ve probably heard of the phrase \'fasion is art\'.

>>You\'ve probably heard of the phrase \'fashion is art\'.


What you see in a fashion show isn\'t on sale the very next day.

>>CORRECT!


I think fasion show\'s purpose is to show a designer\'s aesthtic, mood, a feeling or a perspective.

>>I think fashion show\'s purpose is to show a designer\'s aesthetic emotions , a feeling or a perspective.


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