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What do you think about world peace There are a lot of types of war exists in the world. Even if there is no war using weapons with this century same as before, there is still war existed for their profit called trading war. Other war is happened because of the reason why is their nationality, and religion. Moreover, there is a war which has been continuing between Taiwan and China owing to the becoming independent. Furthermore, the war among each countries is still on progress since they would like to extend their area for their resources on the land, air and ocean. All of the reasons are having the same base and it\'s because of our greedy. Even though we know that, it might not be solved. And there is a famous sentence in Korea \'there is no end to the greed of human, so that the same mistakes will exist again and again\'. Hence, I do never think I can see world peace although my soul is apart from my body. It\'s impossible to solve all the problems in all of the world.

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What do you think about world peace?

There are a lot of types of war exists in the world.

>>There are a lot of types of wars that exist in the world.

Even if there is no war using weapons with this century same as before, there is still war existed for their profit called trading war.

>>Even if there were no weapons used in wars within this century just like in the past, there will still be wars for a profit called trade wars.

Other war is happened because of the reason why is their nationality, and religion.

>>Other wars happen because of race and religion.

Moreover, there is a war which has been continuing between Taiwan and China owing to the becoming independent.

>>Moreover, there has been an ongoing war between Taiwan and China for the sake of independence.

Furthermore, the war among each countries is still on progress since they would like to extend their area for their resources on the land, air and ocean.

>>Furthermore, the are wars that exist among each countries, since they aim to extend their areas for more resources such as land, air and sea.

All of the reasons are having the same base and it\'s because of our greedy.

>>The main reason is solely based on man’s greed.

Even though we know that, it might not be solved.

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or>>Even if this is a known fact, it is hard to solv.

And there is a famous sentence in Korea \'there is no end to the greed of human, so that the same mistakes will exist again and again\'.

>>There is a famous expression in Korea, “there is no end to human greed, thus the same mistake will repeat itself over and over again”.

Hence, I do never think I can see world peace although my soul is apart from my body.

>>Hence, I can never see world peace coming to fruition, even after I die and my soul will finally be separated from my body.

It\'s impossible to solve all the problems in all of the world.

>>It\'s impossible to solve all of the problems that exist in the world.