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I would like to describe myself, there are several things that the point for me.
first, I have a good sense what people want to do since i\'m youngest in the family. I\'v tried to let me know how to satisfy my parents. but it has not always positive affect on my personality. because, i\'v read someone\'s countenance. however, i try to change my mind in a positive way.
second, I\'m a friendly person since i work on shipyard. when i was young, i\'m a extreme shy boy. but nowadays, I changed to an active person. because, when i work on shipyard where is unfamiliar for me in 2013, i studied for how to hanging out with the other people.
Finally, i prefer to doing activity such as sports and trip with friends. when i was student, I was not an athletic person. but i started to exercising, i become to people who would like to doing sports. Thus, when i have enough time to doing exercise with my friends, i\'m willing to spend time with them.
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>> I would like to describe myself. There are several things that I want to point out about me.
first, I have a good sense what people want to do since i\'m youngest in the family.
>> First, I have a good sense of what people want to do since I\'m youngest in the family.
I\'v tried to let me know how to satisfy my parents. but it has not always positive affect on my personality.
>> I\'ve tried to learn how to satisfy my parents but it didn\'t always have positive effects on my personality.
because, i\'v read someone\'s countenance. however, i try to change my mind in a positive way.
second, I\'m a friendly person since i work on shipyard. when i was young, i\'m a extreme shy boy.
>> The reason for this is because I can see through peoples facial expressions. However, I always try to change my mind in a positive way.
>> Secondly, I\'m a friendly person since I work on a shipyard. When I was young, I was extremely shy.
but nowadays, I changed to an active person. because, when i work on shipyard where is unfamiliar for me in 2013, i studied for how to hanging out with the other people.
Finally, i prefer to doing activity such as sports and trip with friends. when i was student, I was not an athletic person.
>> Nowadays, I changed and I became active. When I work on a shipyard which is unfamiliar for me in 2013, I had to challenge myself and learn how to hang out with other people.
>> Finally, I prefer doing activities such as sports and going on trips with friends. When I was a student, I was not an athletic person.
but i started to exercising, i become to people who would like to doing sports.
>> When i started to exercising, I came to love doing sports.
Thus, when i have enough time to doing exercise with my friends, i\'m willing to spend time with them
>> Thus, when I have enough time to exercise with my friends, I\'m always willing to spend time with them.
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