homework
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The rate of students\' suicide has increased over the last five years.
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According to a research, 54 percent of students who suicided was because of school grades.
>>According to a research, 54 percent of students who committed suicide was because of school grades.
The biggest reason for senile suicide was because of loneliness through isolation.
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There were also high rate of soldier\'s suicide.
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Most of them were because of violence from seniors.
>>Most of them were because of violence from the seniors.
People who try suicide usually blame themselves for not being good enough.
>>People who tried committing suicide usually blame themselves for not being good enough.
Some of them say they are sorry to their family, but life is just too hard.
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>> Life is just too hard while some of them say they are sorry to their family.
When students take education to prevent suicide, they learn that there were resposiblities for the victim\'s neighbor to acknowledge the symptoms of suicide.
>> When students take education to prevent suicide, they learn that there were responsibilities for the victim\'s neighbor to acknowledge the symptoms of suicide.
We don\'t learn that most reasons of suicide are problems of social structure.
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>>Social structures are problems of suicide that we didn\'t learn.
We blame the superficial reasons, not the fundamental cause.
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>>Superficial reasons are to blame not the fundamental cause.
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