Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
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~Teacher Lucy
It is true that downloading music from the internet has increased over the past years.
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>>Downloading music from the internet has increased over the passed years.
However, many people still buy albums and records of musicians they like.
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One reason is because an album comes with pictures of the musicians.
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>>Pictures of musicians are in the albums.
Having music in a phone and having it in real life also feels different.
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>>Both are different in real life.
Number of buying albums has decreased, but people still pursue possessing what they can see.
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Therefore I think in the future making a full album will decrease , but it will still remain.
>>Therefore, I think making a full album in the future will decrease , but it will still remain.
There is a change in the music industry affected from the development of internet.
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Musicians sometimes make a single song that can be only heard on the internet.
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>>Some small groups of musicians make a single song the can be heard on the internet.
In the future, I believe it will grow.
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>>I believe it will grow in the future.
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