Homework

I prefer traveling with a group but the number of group should be maximum 4. If I go travel alone, I may be able to think about me more since I have much time to concentrate myself. Then I would find who I am, what I have to do for the furture something like that. But I prefer doing something with others. If there is a thing which makes me happy, it would be more happier when I am with others to share the feeling. However, I don\'t like to be gathered more than 4 persons since it\'s very hard to be mingled all together. If there were more than 5, it might be divided two groups in one group. Furthermore, it would be better for saving the cost regarding the having yummy foods, transportation, and accommodation rather than going somewhere alone. But having trip with others should be with the persons who knows how to understand others and knows how to help each other. it\'s a suffering and giving me a stress if a person is a selfish.

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Homework

I prefer traveling with a group but the number of group should be maximum 4.

>>I prefer traveling with a group but the maximum number of people should be up to 4 only.

If I go travel alone, I may be able to think about me more since I have much time to concentrate myself.

>>If I travel alone, I may be able to think about myself more since I have a lot of time to concentrate on my life more.

Then I would find who I am, what I have to do for the furture something like that.

>>Then I would be able to discover who I am really, on what should I have to do about the future, and such thoughts like these.

But I prefer doing something with others.

CORRECT!

or>>Although, I’d rather work with others.

If there is a thing which makes me happy, it would be more happier when I am with others to share the feeling.

>>If something is making me happy, I would be much happier if I am with others to share this kind feeling.

However, I don\'t like to be gathered more than 4 persons since it\'s very hard to be mingled all together.

>>However, I don\'t like to be with more than 4 persons since it\'s very hard to mingle with this number of people.

If there were more than 5, it might be divided two groups in one group.

>>If there are more than 5, it could be divided into two groups.

Furthermore, it would be better for saving the cost regarding the having yummy foods, transportation, and accommodation rather than going somewhere alone.

>>Furthermore, it would be better to save the cost of having yummy foods, paying the transportation and the accommodations if you go somewhere alone.

But having trip with others should be with the persons who knows how to understand others and knows how to help each other.

>>But going on a trip with a group, should be with the people who are understanding and know how to help others.

it\'s a suffering and giving me a stress if a person is a selfish.

>>it causes me a lot of suffering and stress if a person is selfish.