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2019-11-27 · 첨삭 강사 Lucy

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Some people believe that humanity is divided into distinct races, others believe that all human beings belong to only one race. What do you think ? I thibk that all human beings belong to one race. The science of genetics demonstrates that humans cannot be divided into biologically distinct subcategories. and it challenges the traditional concept of different races of humans as biologically separate and distinct. This is validated by many decades of research. In other words, “race itself is a social construct,” with no biological basis. Reason why some believe humanity is devided into distinct race is because of different skin colour and body shape. However I think that all human beings started as one race and evoluated according to the climate and landscapes.

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I thibk that all human beings belong to one race.

>>I think that all human beings belong to one race.


The science of genetics demonstrates that humans cannot be divided into biologically distinct subcategories.

>>CORRECT!


 and it challenges the traditional concept of different races of humans as biologically separate and distinct.

>> And it challenges the traditional concept of different races of humans as biologically separate and distinct.


This is validated by many decades of research.

>>CORRECT!

>>Researchers for decades validated it.


In other words, “race itself is a social construct,” with no biological basis.

>>CORRECT!


 Reason why some believe humanity is devided into distinct race is because of different skin colour and body shape.

>>The reason why some believe humanity is divided into distinct race is because of different skin color and body shape.


However I think that all human beings started as one race and evoluated according to the climate and landscapes.

>>However, I think that all human beings started as one race and evolved according to the climate and landscapes.

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