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What are your thoughts on Korea\'s healthcare system?
I think Korea provides good healthcare system to their people. Whether you are rich or not, we have to get an insurance. So, almost everyone can go to hospital when they are sick. All things are fine except for stuff related to emergency. Some hospitals are reluctant to have emergency part because it\'s not that profitable. So, patients who get severe injury are roaming to find a hospital that can take these kinds of patients while golden hour for patients is passing by
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Jean
What are your thoughts on Korea\'s healthcare system?
I think Korea provides good healthcare system to their people.
>> I think Korea provides a good healthcare system to their people.
Whether you are rich or not, we have to get an insurance.
>> or: People are entitled to an insurance regardless of their financial status.
So, almost everyone can go to hospital when they are sick.
>> or: For this reason, almost everyone can go to hospital when they are sick.
All things are fine except for stuff related to emergency.
>> correct
Some hospitals are reluctant to have emergency part because it\'s not that profitable. So, patients who get severe injury are roaming to find a hospital that can take these kinds of patients while golden hour for patients is passing by.
>> Some hospitals are reluctant to have an emergency division because it\'s not that profitable that\'s why patients who get severe injury have to go from one hospital to the next hospital to find one that can take these kinds of patients while the golden hour for patients is passing by.
>> [If you roam an area or roam around it, you wander or travel around it without having a particular purpose.]
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