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Is it common for people to protest in your country? What do they usually protest about?
Yes, it\'s common for people to protest in my country. i absolutely agree that demonstrations are important for people to speak out their voices. But, i feel that it gets one step beyond the line. There are too many demonstrations. and some of them are very selfish things.
And in my perspective, The more demonstrations happens, the more police men have to work for them. So, i hope that they protest about really important issues.
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Jean
Is it common for people to protest in your country? What do they usually protest about?
Yes, it\'s common for people to protest in my country.
>> correct
i absolutely agree that demonstrations are important for people to speak out their voices. But, i feel that it gets one step beyond the line.
>> I firmly believe that demonstrations are significant avenues of freedom of speech, but I feel that they sometimes cross the line.
There are too many demonstrations. and some of them are very selfish things.
>> There are too many demonstrations and some of them are organised for very selfish reasons.
And in my perspective, The more demonstrations happens, the more police men have to work for them.
>> Furthermore, in my perspective, the more demonstrations that are organised, the more that policemen have to work to keep the peace.
So, I hope that they protest about really important issues.
>> or: For this reason, I hope that demonstrators take to the streets only for important issues.
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