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Alchol or tabacco companies should be not allowed to advertise.
both of them make people more and more get worse health.
Alchol make people mentally violent and worse a liver.
Tabacco make people worse lungs
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Hi [이름]! ^^
both of them make people more and more get worse health.
Alchol make people mentally violent and worse a liver.
Tabacco make people worse lungs
I agree with your composition 100%!
Such vices are very bad for one\'s health.
Thank you for sharing this with me!
~t. Ally
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Alchol or tabacco companies should be not allowed to advertise.
>> Alcohol and tobacco companies should not be allowed to advertise.
both of them make people more and more get worse health.
>> Both of them make people get bad to even worse health.
Alchol make people mentally violent and worse a liver.
>> Alcohol makes people mentally violent and have a bad liver condition.
Tabacco make people worse lungs
>> Tobacco makes people contract lung conditions.
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