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학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
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~Teacher Lucy
Our education system gives students an oppurtunity to find their interests in the first year of middle school.
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>>In the first year of middle school, our education system gives opportunity to find interest.
We go different kinds of field trips with the purpose of findkng a job they want.
>> We go to different kinds of field trips with the purpose of finding a job they want.
However, I believe this kind of oppurtunities are not really efficient.
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Overall, first year of middle school is too young to know what they want to do as an adult.
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Dreams change over time, nevertheless our education does not give students to have enoigh time to deeply think about their future.
>> Dreams change over time, nevertheless our education does not give students to have enough time to deeply think about their future.
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