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Why do you think is plastic surgery very popular nowadays? Do you think people should avail of this service? Why or why not?
The reason why plastic surgery is very popular nowadays is due to media. They are making a perception that appearance is the most important thing. It affects to people\'s thinking unconsciously. I also become one of them. Although i know that appearance is not the whole story, but, it has been already stuck in my head. and I think we don\'t have right to stop people doing plastic surgery. becuase we have freedom to do whatever they want if it is not illegal.
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That\'s right! ^^
I agree with your opinions.
Thank you for sharing them here.
As we all know, modern society dictates that it is important to have a nice physical appearance.
Which is why people resort to such procedures.
They are not hurting anyone, so they may do as they please. ^^
~t. Ally
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The reason why plastic surgery is very popular nowadays is due to media.
>> CORRECT!
They are making a perception that appearance is the most important thing. It affects to people\'s thinking unconsciously.
>> They are making a perception that appearance is the most important thing and it affects the people\'s way of thinking unconsciously.
I also become one of them.
>> I have also become one of them.
Although i know that appearance is not the whole story, but, it has been already stuck in my head.
>> Although I know that appearance is not the whole story, but, it has already been stuck in my head.
and I think we don\'t have right to stop people doing plastic surgery. becuase we have freedom to do whatever they want if it is not illegal.
>> And I don\'t think we have the right to stop people from doing plastic surgery because we all have the freedom to do whatever we want as long as it\'s not illegal.
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