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2019-12-16 · 첨삭 강사 Elly

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Would you care to have a pet? Why or why not?  I love pets, but I do not want to have it. First, it is very hard for taking care of these to me. It\'s because I would better have to spend my time to improve myself, and to find another half of mine. So that, I don\'t think I could fully concentrate at taking care of the small thing. Second, if I have one, I might make it to be waited all day only for me. Because there is no one who could play with in the room, it would be crying and barking in front of a door until it sees me. Third, if I breed a thing which can barking in the apartment, I have to choose between making an animal to be quiet with cordectomy surgery and making neighbors to get stressed due to barking sound. I know both of the things aren\'t good. Thus, I just want to watch small things on the internet, and YouTube for healing myself.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름],

Thank you for sharing your ideas in your homework!

Have a great day!

Teacher ELLY.

Homework

Would you care to have a pet? Why or why not?

I love pets, but I do not want to have it.

>>I love pets, but I do not want to have one.

First, it is very hard for taking care of these to me.

>>First, it is very hard for me to take care of one.

It\'s because I would better have to spend my time to improve myself, and to find another half of mine.

>>It\'s because it will be better for me to have some time in improving myself, and to find my better half.

So that, I don\'t think I could fully concentrate at taking care of the small thing.

>>So, I don\'t think I can fully concentrate on taking care of something small like a pet.

Second, if I have one, I might make it to be waited all day only for me.

>>Second, if I have one, I might make it wait for me all day long.

Because there is no one who could play with in the room, it would be crying and barking in front of a door until it sees me.

>>Because no one will play with the pet in the room, so it would be crying and barking in front of the door until it will finally see me.

Third, if I breed a thing which can barking in the apartment, I have to choose between making an animal to be quiet with cordectomy surgery and making neighbors to get stressed due to barking sound.

>> Third, if I own something that keeps barking in the apartment, I have to choose between making the animal quiet by having its larynx removed by surgery because it would drive the neighbors to stress due to the incessant barking sound.

I know both of the things aren\'t good.

>>I know that both of these things aren\'t good.

Thus, I just want to watch small things on the internet, and YouTube for healing myself.

>>Thus, I just want to watch these small animals on the internet and on YouTube to heal my emotions.

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