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2019-12-17 · 첨삭 강사 Ally

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Are you more of a spontaneous or structured person? Is there a reason as to why you are such? I think i\'m more of a spontaneous person. That\'s why i feel very stuffy when i see structured person. I have been through many stuffy situation. But, i can\'t do anything. Because they were all my seniors. But now, i have lots of juniors. So, i\'m trying to fix irrationality. Sometimes, It truly needs kind of structured things to keep the rule in hierarchical society. But, i believe that we could realize spontaneousness in structured society. then, it kills two birds with one stone.

강사 첨삭

Hi, Jay. ^^

Yes, I think we discussed about this a bit today.

I am also like you. :D

Good us of the idiomatic expression at the end of your composition!^^

~t. Ally

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I think i\'m more of a spontaneous person.

>> I think I\'m more of a spontaneous person. (always capitalize your \"I\" pronoun ^^)

That\'s why i feel very stuffy when i see structured person.

>> That\'s why I feel very stuffy when I am with a structured person.

I have been through many stuffy situation.

>> I have been through many stuffy situations.

But, i can\'t do anything. Because they were all my seniors.

>> But I can\'t do anything about it because they were all my seniors.

But now, i have lots of juniors. So, i\'m trying to fix irrationality.

>> But now, I have a lot of juniors, so I\'m trying to fix the irrationality in the group.

Sometimes, It truly needs kind of structured things to keep the rule in hierarchical society.

>> Sometimes we truly need to have kind of a structured process to keep the organization in a hierarchical society.

But, i believe that we could realize spontaneousness in structured society.

>> But, i believe that we could realize spontaneity in a structured society.

Then, it kills two birds with one stone.

>> CORRECT!

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