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What sport makes no sense to you? Why?
When i was young, Fighting like ufc was the thing that i couldn\'t understand. Whenever i watched UFC on TV, it was too cruel for me.
I was wondering why they didn\'t stop fighting even if one was bleeding in his face and why everyone\'s just watching it. There was no one to pause the game. It was very shocked for younger me. But, now, i understand the system operates UFC. So, i almost don\'t feel any cruelty when i watch the game.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Jay. ^^
I was wondering why they didn\'t stop fighting even if one was bleeding in his face and why everyone\'s just watching it.
I agree with this composition.
It\'s such a dangerous sport!
But people are free to do what they want to, so we have to let them play what they want to play. :D
~t. Ally
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When i was young, Fighting like ufc was the thing that i couldn\'t understand.
>> When I was younger, fighting sports, such as UFC, was something I couldn\'t understand.
Whenever i watched UFC on TV, it was too cruel for me.
>> CORRECT!
I was wondering why they didn\'t stop fighting even if one was bleeding in his face and why everyone\'s just watching it.
>> I was wondering why they didn\'t stop fighting even if one\'s face was bleeding and why everyone\'s just watching it.
There was no one to pause the game.
>> No one wanted to pause the game.
It was very shocked for younger me.
>> It was very shocking for my younger self.
But, now, i understand the system operates UFC.
>> But now, I understand how the UFC system works.
So, I almost don\'t feel any cruelty when I watch the game.
>> CORRECT!
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