Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Do you think we create a new problem with each invention? Think of 2 examples.
Transportation development makes air problems. The gas vehicles make polluted air a lot. It has become hotter in summer and colder in winter because of the destruction of the ozone layer. Second, Information and communications\' development makes a lot of problems.
Although there are more advantages of the development, Problems are also many. It has a risk that people\'s information could be exposed to public by some hackers.
강사 첨삭
These examples are great!
It really is difficult to make something that doesn\'t cause any problems in the long run. :(
Someday I hope the earth recovers from all its destruction.
~t. Ally
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Transportation development makes air problems.
>> CORRECT!
The gas vehicles make polluted air a lot.
>> The gas used for vehicles pollutes the air a lot.
OR>> The gas used for vehicles causes a lot of air pollution.
It has become hotter in summer and colder in winter because of the destruction of the ozone layer.
>> CORRECT!
Second, Information and communications\' development makes a lot of problems.
>> CORRECT!
Although there are more advantages of the development, Problems are also many.
>> Although there are more advantages to this development, there are also many problems.
It has a risk that people\'s information could be exposed to public by some hackers.
>> There is the risk that people\'s information could be exposed to the public by some hackers.
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