Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
What are the main attractions in your hometown? Tell me about 2 of them.
My hometown is the biggest pier city in Korea. So, There are beautiful beaches. Among them, i love Gwangan beaches. Because it has a huge bridge above the sea. When i drink an americano in a cafe which is located in front of the beach, i feel very relaxed. Sometimes, i go there when i want to cool my head. and i love bicycle road which is along with SueYoung river. It\'s so well paved along the river that i can ride a bicycle without being bored. It\'s more beautiful when i do it on sunset.
강사 첨삭
I am imagining it, and it really seems very beautiful! ^^
I hope I can visit the place someday too!
~t. Ally
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My hometown is the biggest pier city in Korea.
>> CORRECT!
So, There are beautiful beaches.
>> So there are a lot of beautiful beaches.
Among them, i love Gwangan beaches.
>> Among them, I love the Gwangan beach.
Because it has a huge bridge above the sea.
>> CORRECT!
When i drink an americano in a cafe which is located in front of the beach, i feel very relaxed.
>> When I drink an Americano coffee at the cafe that is located in front of the beach, I feel very relaxed.
Sometimes, i go there when i want to cool my head.
>> CORRECT!
and i love bicycle road which is along with SueYoung river.
>> I also love the bicycle road, which is located along the SueYoung river.
It\'s so well paved along the river that i can ride a bicycle without being bored.
>> CORRECT!
It\'s more beautiful when i do it on sunset.
>> It\'s even more beautiful when I go there during sunset.
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