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2020-01-08 · 첨삭 강사 Lucy

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How do you look at the prospect of retiring? Do you dread it or look forward to it? Why? I look forward to retiring. One of the reasons is because traveling around the world has been a dream fir a long time. When I am retired, and if I have enough money, I would like to spend the rest of my life with doing whatever I want to do. Before I get retired, I am positive that there will not be much free time to spend for me. Another reason is because I want to be free of the buisiness-related people I am not very fond of. As we are part of the society there are times when we have to encounter people againsy our wishes. However, when i get retured, I can only make relationships with people I want to spend time with. Therefore I cannot wait for the day I get retired.

강사 첨삭

Thank you [이름]!

~Teacher Lucy


 I look forward to retiring.

>>CORRECT!

 One of the reasons is because traveling around the world has been a dream fir a long time.

>> One of the reasons is because traveling around the world has been my dream for a long time.

When I am retired, and if I have enough money, I would like to spend the rest of my life with doing whatever I want to do.

>>CORRECT!

 Before I get retired, I am positive that there will not be much free time to spend for me.

>>Before I get retired, I am positive that there will not be much free time for me to spend .

Another reason is because I want to be free of the business-related people I am not very fond of.

>>CORRECT!

As we are part of the society here are times when we have to encounter people againsy our wishes.

>>As we are part of the society there are times when we have to encounter people against our wishes.
 However, when i get retured, I can only make relationships with people I want to spend time with.

>>However, when I get retired, I can only make relationships with people I want to spend time with.

Therefore I cannot wait for the day I get retired.

>> Therefore, I cannot wait for the day I get retired.

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