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2020-01-10 · 첨삭 강사 Lucy

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Some people like to spend time with people, and the others like to spend tine on thei own. We often devide them into extrovert person and introvert person. Nowadays, younger generations are in need of some time for themselves no matter they are an extrovert person or an introvert person. I can guess that tihs phenomenom is because they get too much stress from spending time with other people. I cannot exactly pick an event that made today change from the past. And the mind of generations did not change as dramatically as we might think. Out sense of rights and idividualism has been improved.

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~Teacher Lucy


Some people like to spend time with people, and the others like to spend tine on thei own.

>>Some people like to spend time with people, and the others like to spend time on their own.

 We often devide them into extrovert person and introvert person.

>>We often divide them into extrovert person and introvert person.

Nowadays, younger generations are in need of some time for themselves no matter they are an extrovert person or an introvert person.

>>Nowadays, younger generations are in need of some time for themselves no matter if they are an extrovert person or an introvert person.

I can guess that tihs phenomenom is because they get too much stress from spending time with other people.

>>I can guess that this phenomenon is because they get too much stress from spending time with other people.

I cannot exactly pick an event that made today change from the past.

>>CORRECT!

And the mind of generations did not change as dramatically as we might think.

>>CORRECT!

 Out sense of rights and idividualism has been improved.

>>Out sense of rights and individualism has been improved.

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