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Hello Sir [이름]! It\'s good to know that there are efforts from the government to make the working environment for everyone to improve. Let us hope that the efforts will continue. Have a good day!~~T.Dee
Korean workers work 2,113hours per year.
>>CORRECT!
Korea is the second longest working country in the OECD countries after Mexico.
>>Korea is the second among the countries with the longest working hours after Mexico according the OECD.
All Koreans have worked hard to escape poverty after the Korean war, and as a result Korea became a recognized economic power in the world.
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But as economic glows rapidly, it caused many side effects like the long working hours.
>>But, as the economy grew rapidly, it caused many side effects, like the long working hours.
The long working hours caused a decrease in the birthrate.
>>CORRECT!
Korean government noticed the reducing the maximum working week from 68 hours to 52 hours to improve the workers\' environment.
>>The Korean government noticed this problem as a result the maximum working week was reduced from 68 hours to 52 hours to improve the workers\' environment.
However, there are many people who are not protected by the law, so it needs more social efforts to improve it.
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