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~Teacher Lucy
Definitely, there is falling birthrate a problem in my country.
>>Definitely, there is falling birthrate problem in my country.
The government tries resolve the birthrate problem.
>>The government tries to resolve the birthrate problem.
But, the government\'s thinking and the people\'s thinking are different.
>>But, the government\'s idea and the people\'s idea are different.
The government says many benefits, but the people are not satisfied.
>> The government says they provide many benefits, but the people are not satisfied.
I think the falling birthrate is not a serious problem.
>>CORRECT!
Because, to marry and childbirth are choices from the people
>>CORRECT!
I think there is having children change someone\'s life.
>>I think having children change someone\'s life.
They have to give up somethings a lot.
>>They have to give up something a lot.
Among many somethings time is most importance that they have to give up.
>>Among these, time is most importance that they have to give up.
Because, time can\'t be reversed.
>>CORRECT!
But I think if they have children, they can get more value then they give up
>> But I think if they have children, it\'ll be more value than giving up.
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