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2020-02-20 · 첨삭 강사 Lucy

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1. I think the causes of stress in my country is a few people. They never listen to other people and they think their ideas are always right. Their ideas are sharp like a sword and they have many complexes. So many celebrities are struggling and dying because of them. But they don\'t know that. But they will realize exactly what they have done some time ago. Ultimately, we all have to need understanding and consideration. 2. If we had stressed, we should change our mental attitude. If i had stress, I think \'It can\'t be true\' in own my way and I accept stress. And I forget my stress while I\'m hobby.

강사 첨삭

Thank you An!

~Teacher Lucy

I think the causes of stress in my country is a few people.

>>I think stressed out people in my country are few.

They never listen to other people and they think their ideas are always right.

>>CORRECT!
Their ideas are sharp like a sword and they have many complexes.

>>CORRECT!

So many celebrities are struggling and dying because of them.

>>So many celebrities are struggling and dying because of it.

But they don\'t know that.

>>CORRECT!

But they will realize exactly what they have done some time ago.

>>CORRECT!

Ultimately, we all have to need understanding and consideration.
>> Ultimately, we all need to have understanding and consideration.
If we had stressed, we should change our mental attitude.

>>CORRECT!

If i had stress, I think \'It can\'t be true\' in own my way and I accept stress.

>> If I had stress, I think \'It can\'t be true\' in my own way and I accept that I\'m stressed out.
And I forget my stress while I\'m hobby.

>> And I forget I\'m stress while I\'m doing my hobbies.

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