homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Q: What\'s your standpoint on this, \"Facebook should be banned\"?
A:
I think that Facebook should be partially banned.
Facebook should impose restrictions on Facebook use on children under the age of 12. Because children lack the ability to pass on indiscriminate information, adults have obligation to protect children. However, we don\'t need to ban it because it is free that people over the age of 12 use the SNS.
강사 첨삭
I definitely agree with your point, Bo [이름].
Great job!
~Teacher Eve.
I think that Facebook should be partially banned.
>> Correct!
Facebook should impose restrictions on Facebook use on children under the age of 12.
>> Facebook should impose restrictions on children under the age of 12.
Because children lack the ability to pass on indiscriminate information, adults have obligation to protect children.
>> Because children lack the ability to pass on indiscriminate information, adults have the obligation to protect children.
However, we don\'t need to ban it because it is free that people over the age of 12 use the SNS.
>> However, we don\'t need to ban it because it is free. People over the age of 12 use the SNS.
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