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Q : Have you ever thought of fighting crime by becoming a police officer?
When I was a young boy, I dreamed of being a soldier.
Because the soldier’s uniform is very charming.
Korea is divided into South and North and this makes the role of soldiers very large in Korea.
This would also be one reason I wanted to be a soldier.
When I was a high school student I once thought of becoming a police officer.
But I wanted to be a police officer because of the police uniform, not to fight the crime.
I think that the police uniform is very attractive, but to be a police officer it is need to have a devotion to country.
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Hello Sir [이름]! I think that a lot of young boys thought of being in the force but had changed their desires as they grew up. And, you are one of them. I think that it\'s okay because afterall you had chosen a good career. Have a good day!~~T.Dee
When I was a young boy, I dreamed of being a soldier.
>>CORRECT!
Because the soldier’s uniform is very charming.
>>CORRECT!
>>OR: When I was a young boy, I dreamed of being a soldier because the soldier’s uniform is very charming.
Korea is divided into South and North and this makes the role of soldiers very large in Korea.
>>Korea is divided into South and North and this makes the role of soldiers very important in Korea.
This would also be one reason I wanted to be a soldier.
>>CORRECT!
When I was a high school student I once thought of becoming a police officer.
>>CORRECT!
But I wanted to be a police officer because of the police uniform, not to fight the crime.
>>CORRECT!
I think that the police uniform is very attractive, but to be a police officer it is need to have a devotion to country.
>>I think that the police uniform is very attractive but to be a police officer devotion to the country is needed.
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