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HOMEWORK:
Writing Task: Do you think more people will work from home in the near future? Why? Why not?
It depends on jobs. For example, in case of office jobs, it\'s possble to work from home. We can use IT gadgets such as a laptop PC or a mobile phone through online. We can email and call right away and have an online face-to-face meeting with coworkers. Even, we can get an approval from a boss through an electric approval system.
While, in case of field jobs such as factory workers, shop clerks or school teachers, they have only to go to their work place to work. Even if the advanced IT system is coming, they will have what to do in their work places.
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It depends on jobs.
>>It depends on the job.
For example, in case of office jobs, it\'s possble to work from home.
>>For example, for office jobs, it is possible to work from home.
We can use IT gadgets such as a laptop PC or a mobile phone through online.
>>CORRECT!
OR: IT gadgets such as notebook PCs and cell phones can be used online.
We can email and call right away and have an online face-to-face meeting with coworkers.
>>CORRECT!
OR: We can send email and make phone calls immediately and have face-to-face meetings online with our colleagues
Even, we can get an approval from a boss through an electric approval system.
>>CORRECT!
While, in case of field jobs such as factory workers, shop clerks or school teachers, they have only to go to their work place to work.
>>CORRECT!
OR: Meanwhile, for field jobs such as factory workers, store clerks and school teachers, they just have to go to work and work.
Even if the advanced IT system is coming, they will have what to do in their work places.
>>Even with the introduction of advanced IT systems, there is work to be done in the workplace.
>>It depends on the job.
For example, in case of office jobs, it\'s possble to work from home.
>>For example, for office jobs, it is possible to work from home.
We can use IT gadgets such as a laptop PC or a mobile phone through online.
>>CORRECT!
OR: IT gadgets such as notebook PCs and cell phones can be used online.
We can email and call right away and have an online face-to-face meeting with coworkers.
>>CORRECT!
OR: We can send email and make phone calls immediately and have face-to-face meetings online with our colleagues
Even, we can get an approval from a boss through an electric approval system.
>>CORRECT!
While, in case of field jobs such as factory workers, shop clerks or school teachers, they have only to go to their work place to work.
>>CORRECT!
OR: Meanwhile, for field jobs such as factory workers, store clerks and school teachers, they just have to go to work and work.
Even if the advanced IT system is coming, they will have what to do in their work places.
>>Even with the introduction of advanced IT systems, there is work to be done in the workplace.
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