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Is online studying more beneficial compared to classroom-based learning? Why or why not?
Online studying has always been a subject of debate. Some people think that online studying has various advantages while others feel that it does more harm than good.
Although arguments on both sides are worth exploring, I think that studying online makes time more flexible.
On the one had, those who believe traditional studying is more efficiency have valid reasons. To be specific, many students tend to be more attendance when studying at a school. There are fixed studying hours as well as teacher that keep them alert. Also, numerous researches have shown that interact with classmates encourages students and allows them to better adapt to the society.
On the other had, there are who feel studying online raises the quality of life. Not only students but also working moms can study whenever they have the Internet. Given the choice between the two. I firmly believe that online studying is perferable.
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Thank you for sharing your thoughts. Eve! ~~
Although arguments on both sides are worth exploring, I think that studying online makes time more flexible.
On the one had, those who believe traditional studying is more efficiency have valid reasons.
On the other hand, there are who feel studying online raises the quality of life.
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Online studying has always been a subject of debate. Some people think that online studying has various advantages while others feel that it does more harm than good.
>> CORRECT!
Although arguments on both sides are worth exploring, I think that studying online makes time more flexible.
>> CORRECT!
On the one had, those who believe traditional studying is more efficiency have valid reasons.
>> On the other hand, those who believe traditional studying is more efficiency have valid reasons.
To be specific, many students tend to be more attendance when studying at a school.
>> To be specific, many students tend to have more attendance when studying at a school.
There are fixed studying hours as well as teacher that keep them alert.
>> There are fixed studying hours as well as teachers that keep them alert.
Also, numerous researches have shown that interact with classmates encourages students and allows them to better adapt to the society.
>> CORRECT!
On the other hand, there are who feel studying online raises the quality of life.
>> CORRECT!
Not only students but also working moms can study whenever they have the Internet.
>> CORRECT!
Given the choice between the two. I firmly believe that online studying is perferable.
>> Given the choice between the two, I firmly believe that online studying is preferable.
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