homework
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Essay: Some people like to work at jobs that are exciting and full of new challenges. Other people prefer jobs where the work is routine and predictable. What kind of job would you prefer and why? State your opinion and provide reasons for your view.
I prefer to work at jobs that are exciting and full of new challenges.
There are some reasons to support my opinion.
First, I get sick of routine activities easily. If I do the same action repeatedly, I will not feel any progress in myself.
For example, I chose a nurse as my job because nurses can experience various situations and can meet a lot of people.
Second, I can learn a lot and extend my perspective while challenging new things. It will make me more professional. And it is beneficial for me in the long run.
Therefore, I will always be in a position to challenge new things.
강사 첨삭
Hi Bo [이름],
That was quick! Thanks for the prompt response to the homework you were given. It only shows your diligence in studying. I just realized that I gave the same question or a similar question:) However, thanks for adding some changes and most of your sentences are perfect!
-Rachel
I prefer to work at jobs that are exciting and full of new challenges. (and) There are some reasons to support my opinion.
>> correct
First, I get sick of routine activities easily. If I do the same action repeatedly, I will not feel any progress in myself.
>> correct (awesome)
For example, I chose a nurse as my job because nurses can experience various situations and can meet a lot of people.
For example, I chose a nurse as my job because nurses can experience various situations and can meet a lot of people.
>> correct (we just say nursing instead of nurse)
>> For example, I chose nursing as my job because nurses can encounter various situations and can get acquainted with a lot of people.
Second, I can learn a lot and extend my perspective while challenging new things. It will make me more professional. And it is beneficial for me in the long run. Therefore, I will always be in a position to challenge new things.
>> correct (perfect)
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