homework
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Q : Do you agree with the following statement? Money guarantees happiness. Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
I agree money guarantees happiness.
There are some reasons to support my opinion.
First, when I am sick, I can get medical service without a worry about fee.
For example, although impoverished people know their disease, they can\'t go to a hospital because they aren\'t ability to pay for medical fee. This situation might make them more powerless.
Secondly, rich people can enjoy new experience like travelling.
Traveling is be able to make them happy as well because new experience can infuse vitality. And travel is a way out of the boring routine.
Hence, I agree money guarantees happiness.
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-Rachel
I agree money guarantees happiness.
>> correct
>> OR: I agree with the idea that money guarantees happiness.
There are some reasons to support my opinion.
There are some reasons to support my opinion.
>> correct
First, when I am sick, I can get medical service without a worry about fee.
First, when I am sick, I can get medical service without a worry about fee.
>> correct
>> First, when I am sick, I can have access to medical services without worrying about the finances.
For example, although impoverished people know their disease, they can\'t go to a hospital because they aren\'t ability to pay for medical fee. This situation might make them more powerless.
For example, although impoverished people know their disease, they can\'t go to a hospital because they aren\'t ability to pay for medical fee. This situation might make them more powerless.
>> correct (acceptable when speaking,)
>> OR: Unlike for impoverished people, although they are aware of their illness, they can\'t go to a hospital because they can\'t afford to pay for the medical fee.
Secondly, rich people can enjoy new experience like travelling.
Secondly, rich people can enjoy new experience like travelling.
>> correct
Traveling is be able to make them happy as well because new experience can infuse vitality. And travel is a way out of the boring routine.
Traveling is be able to make them happy as well because new experience can infuse vitality. And travel is a way out of the boring routine.
>> correct (just remove be before able- is able)
>> OR: Traveling makes them happy because new experience can infuse vitality. Also, traveling is a way to break the monotony of their routine.
Hence, I agree money guarantees happiness.
Hence, I agree money guarantees happiness.
>> correct
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