Homework
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1. Do you think you have child labor in your country?
I think we have child labor in our contury. Because I could see lot of people who are working at specific places such as a convenience store, I think we have.
2. Why is it important to stop child labor?
I don\'t think it should be stopped since they will learn how to make money in the early age. And they will know value of money, and might learn how to save it, and spend it with the worth way.
However, law for child labor is not good enough since there are lots of bad adults who take the advantage from imperfect rule in the worlds. So I think rules for child labor needs to be improved protecting them.
강사 첨삭
Thank you [이름] Tea!
~Lucy
I think we have child labor in our contury.
>>I think we have child labor in our country.
Because I could see lot of people who are working at specific places such as a convenience store, I think we have.
>>CORRECT!
I don\'t think it should be stopped since they will learn how to make money in the early age.
>>CORRECT!
And they will know value of money, and might learn how to save it, and spend it with the worth way.
>>And they will know the value of money, and might learn how to save it, and spend it with the worth way.
However, law for child labor is not good enough since there are lots of bad adults who take the advantage from imperfect rule in the worlds.
>>CORRECT!
So I think rules for child labor needs to be improved protecting them.
>>So I think rules for child labor need to be improved for protecting them.
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