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The people who decides to follow the customs of the new country will get a benefit to be absorbed in the new society. Customs are cultures, and following other country\'s cultures can help understanding the country. However, following the customs of the new country can hurt diversity. The country\'s culture can improve by accepting diverse culture. I have seeen people who decided to keep the customs of their own. Most customs are a family\'s tradition, however it is now always easy to keep the tradition in foreign countries. Regardless of what I think is right, I prefer to follow the customs of the new country. For one reason, keeping our own customs is to hard in foreign countries, even if you want to. I consider myself to be an idle person, and truely, I am. I believe that preparing my contry\'s custom is distressful and takes up too much energy
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>>> TEACHER GEMMA
The people who decide to follow the customs of the new country will get a benefit to be absorbed in the new society.
>>> CORRECT
Customs are cultures, and following other country\'s cultures can help understanding the country.
>>> CORRECT
However, following the customs of the new country can hurt diversity.
>>> However, following the customs of the new country can hurt diversely.
The country\'s culture can improve by accepting diverse culture.
>>> CORRECT
I have seen people who decided to keep the customs of their own.
>>> CORRECT
Most customs are family\'s traditions, however it is not always easy to keep the tradition in foreign countries.
>>> CORRECT
Regardless of what I think is right, I prefer to follow the customs of the new country.
>>> CORRECT
For one reason, keeping our own customs is to hard in foreign countries, even if you want to.
>>> CORRECT
I consider myself to be an idle person, and truely, I am.
>>> CORRECT
I believe that preparing my country\'s custom is distressful and takes up too much energy.
>>> CORRECT
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