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2020-04-01 · 첨삭 강사 Rachel

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What are some disadvantages and advantages of starting your own business rather than being employed at a company? Give specific reasons and details to support your own opinion. There are some advantages of starting my own business rather than being employed at a company. First, there is not fixed roles so that I can experience various and many things. For example, I might have to do accounting, marketing and so on. I think it will be the foundation for self-development. Second, early members can work with more affection and passion. They will be more cooperative and purpose-oriented. These are good for my company in the long run. For these advantages, I will be able to feel more sense of accomplishment when my own company succeed.

강사 첨삭

Hi Bo [이름]!
Wow, that was quick! Thanks for the prompt reply to the homework you were given:)
-Rachel
There are some advantages of starting my own business rather than being employed at a company.
>> correct
First, there is not fixed roles so that I can experience various and many things. For example, I might have to do accounting, marketing and so on. I think it will be the foundation for self-development.
>> correct
Second, early members can work with more affection and passion. They will be more cooperative and purpose-oriented.
>> correct
>> Second, the founding members or employees can work with more affection and passion. They will be more cooperative and purpose-oriented.
These are good for my company in the long run.
>> correct
For these advantages, I will be able to feel more sense of accomplishment when my own company succeeds.
>> correct (just add S to succeed because the word before it is singular)

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