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2020-05-04 · 첨삭 강사 Sharon

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Writing Exercise: What music brings back memories for you. Describe the memory. Why do you think this is? Answer in 5 sentences or more Hiphop music brings me memories for me. I love to go to a Music festival and I enjoy the mood. Many people enjoy and have fun from same music. We also love the musicians and every one can enjoy the songs. I love to enjoy this kind of energetic mood and release stress. This is the reason why I love to enjoy the Hiphop music.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]!

The focus for this composition is articles.

You have to distinguish general and specific ideas in order to use articles properly.

Ask me in class if you want more clarification.

I know you can do this.^^

~~ Teacher Sharon

Hiphop music brings me memories for me.

>> Hip hop music brings back memories for me.
I love to go to a Music festival and I enjoy the mood.

>> I love going to music festivals to enjoy the scene.
Many people enjoy and have fun from same music.

>> Many people enjoy and have fun with the same music.

We also love the musicians and every one can enjoy the songs.

>> Correct
I love to enjoy this kind of energetic mood and release stress.

>> Correct
This is the reason why I love to enjoy the Hiphop music.

>> This is the reason why I love to enjoy Hip hop music.

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