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2020-05-12 · 첨삭 강사 Lucy

학생이 쓴 원문

1. My mom\'s one of goal is having a garden at home later. She wants to have home made in countryside. And she wants to make her own a garden in the yard. Therefor, she is going to grow flowers. She told me \'All women love flowers. Flowers make women impress and Reminds me of memory when I was [이름], I was loved the most.\' So I think gardening make people good feelings. 2. I think the most effected for our mental is meditation. Meditation makes one\'t emotions quiet and smooth. If you want to control your emotion, you should do meditation. And I think the most good thing for physical health is having active hobbies. For example, riding a bicycle or play football or playing bowling and stuff.

강사 첨삭

Thank you An!
~Lucy

My mom\'s one of goal is having a garden at home later.
>>CORRECT!
She wants to have home made in countryside.
>>CORRECT!
And she wants to make her own a garden in the yard.
>>CORRECT!
Therefor, she is going to grow flowers.
>>Therefore, she is going to grow flowers.
She told me \'All women love flowers.
>>She told me \"All women love flowers\".
Flowers make women impress and Reminds me of memory when I was [이름], I was loved the most.\'
>>Flowers impress women and reminds me of memory when I was [이름], I was loved the most.
So I think gardening make people good feelings.
>>CORRECT!
I think the most effected for our mental is meditation.
>>CORRECT!
Meditation makes one\'t emotions quiet and smooth.
>>Meditation makes one\'s emotions quiet and smooth.
If you want to control your emotion, you should do meditation.
>>CORRECT!
And I think the most good thing for physical health is having active hobbies.
>>CORRECT!
For example, riding a bicycle or play football or playing bowling and stuff.
>>For example, riding a bicycle, playing football or playing bowling and stuff.

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