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2020-05-22 · 첨삭 강사 Ysabelle

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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY: If you would have a business anywhere in Korea, where would it be and why? I would start my business at a supportive office that the government supports it around here Suwon-si, Gyeongki-do province. Because there are some supportive policies for venture companies and startups. Actually, I don\'t strongly care about the place that my office would be placed on. Because I would build an IT company and I aim at every staff can work at home. However, If I get lucky so my company gets bigger so it gets more than hundreds of employees, then I would make the office inside of Seoul.

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I would start my business at a supportive office that the government supports it around here Suwon-si, Gyeongki-do province.
>> I would start my business at a supportive office where the government also supports Suwon-si, Gyeongki-do province.

 Because there are some supportive policies for venture companies and startups. 
>> For this reason, there are some policies that support venture and startups companies.

Actually, I don\'t strongly care about the place that my office would be placed on. 
>> Actually, I don\'t really care where my office would be.

Because I would build an IT company and I aim at every staff can work at home. 
>> I would like to build an IT company which aims to make staffs work at home.

However, If I get lucky so my company gets bigger so it gets more than hundreds of employees, then I would make the office inside of Seoul.
>> However, if I get lucky and my company gets bigger, I will build an office inside Seoul.

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