homework
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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY:
If you had 3 wishes what would it be and why?
First, I would like to have a great sense of business. I think I have knowledge and skills in the IT industry but I need to build up my management skills and business skills to succeed. Second, I want to improve my attractiveness, both physically and mentally. Because attractiveness is one of the most important resources to lead employees easily. Lastly, I hope that I get always lucky. I heard that it\'s almost impossible to success without luck in business.
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Hello [이름]!
Thank you for sharing your ideas in this homework~
I hope you enjoyed answering this as much as I enjoyed reading.
I hope you also get all these wishes as well!
See you in class~
>>First, I would like to have a great sense in business.
I think I have knowledge and skills in the IT industry but I need to build up my management skills and business skills to succeed.
>>CORRECT
Second, I want to improve my attractiveness, both physically and mentally.
>>Second, I want to have my attractiveness - both physically and mentally, improved.
Because attractiveness is one of the most important resources to lead employees easily.
>>Attractiveness is one of the most important resources to lead employees easily.
Lastly, I hope that I get always lucky.
>>Lastly, I hope that I always get lucky.
I heard that it\'s almost impossible to success without luck in business.
>>CORRECT
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