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2020-06-05 · 첨삭 강사 Ysabelle

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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY: On which occasions do people eat cake in Korea? Many people in Korea usually eat cake when somebody\'s birthday comes. We celebrate the birthday person and we eat cake after a meal. Plus, when we want to celebrate something we usually buy a cake. For example, when I was young I had bought a cake for celebrating our anniversary with my girlfriend. I think that this is western culture and I don\'t feel any good or bad about this.

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Many people in Korea usually eat cake when somebody\'s birthday comes. 
>> CORRECT.

We celebrate the birthday person and we eat cake after a meal. 
>> When we celebrate the person\'s birthday, we eat cake after a meal.

Plus, when we want to celebrate something we usually buy a cake 
>> Plus, when we want to celebrate something, we usually buy a cake.

For example, when I was young I had bought a cake for celebrating our anniversary with my girlfriend. 
>> For example, when I was young, I bought a cake to celebrate our anniversary with my girlfriend.

I think that this is western culture and I don\'t feel any good or bad about this.
>> I think that this is from a Western culture, but I don\'t feel good nor bad about this.

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