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Do you think technology is a must to grow a business?
I think that the development of technology is definitely needed to grow its business. First, in the IT industry, most companies run their business based on their technology so that they should grow their technology. How about the other industries\' companies? I think that developing technology is still required because it can help their process go efficiently and rapidly. For instance, these days, farmers can use an automatic farming system called a smart farm. They don\'t need to get bothered from watering, caring for the plants, so on. Most processes proceed by machines, and all the things the farmers should care about is system monitoring.
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>> I think that the development of technology is definitely needed to grow a business.
First, in the IT industry, most companies run their business based on their technology so that they should grow their technology.
>> First, in the IT industry, most companies run their businesses based on their technology which helps them improve on their technology.
How about the other industries\' companies?
>> How about the companies from other industries?
I think that developing technology is still required because it can help their process go efficiently and rapidly.
>> I think that having a technology is required because it can help their processes become more efficient and rapid.
For instance, these days, farmers can use an automatic farming system called a smart farm.
>>CORRECT
They don\'t need to get bothered from watering, caring for the plants, so on.
>> They won\'t be bothered from watering, caring for the plants, and so on.
Most processes proceed by machines, and all the things the farmers should care about is system monitoring.
>> Most processes made by machines and all the things farmers should care about are part of system monitoring.
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