Homework!(About beauty)
학생이 쓴 원문
I think it depends on the job.
People who show their appearance around need a beautiful appearance. For example, celebrities and people in the service industry can benefit more by cultivating themselves and looking beautiful.
However, people with other jobs don\'t have to be beautiful. Instead, you have to develop your own abilities and express yourself.
강사 첨삭
Happy Monday, Hazel! ^^
You\'ve made great sentences in this composition.
Keep it up!
- T. Rina
1. I think it depends on the job.
>> CORRECT!
2. People who show their appearance around need a beautiful appearance.
>> CORRECT!
2. People who show their appearance around need a beautiful appearance.
>> CORRECT!
OR: People who always appear in front of many people need to look physically beautiful.
3. For example, celebrities and people in the service industry can benefit more by cultivating themselves and looking beautiful.
>> CORRECT!
4. However, people with other jobs don\'t have to be beautiful.
4. However, people with other jobs don\'t have to be beautiful.
>> CORRECT!
5. Instead, you have to develop your own abilities and express yourself.
>> CORRECT!
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