homework_about cosmetic surgery
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If you have the chance to get a cosmetic surgery for FREE, would you do it? Why, or why not? If you do, which part of your body would you change and why?
Absolutely No.
>>Absolutely not.
First of all, I'm so scared of surgery.
>>Correct
And there are many bad side effects reported to medical world.
>> And there are many side effects reported in the medical world.
If the cosmetic surgery is not for medical purpose, I don't need it.
>> If it’s not for medical purposes, I don’t need it.
Despite of "For FREE".
>>Despite it is for free. (OR -No matter if it’s free.)
If I change a part of my body, I wanna regain my sight.
>>If I can change a part of my body, I want to regain my good eyesight.
I have -4.5 Diopter in both eyes.
>>Correct
I can't watch anything without glasses)
>> I can't see anything without glasses.
I wanna recieve LASIK eye surgery but many bad side effects are reported.
>> I wanted to receive LASIK eye surgery but many bad side effects were reported.
If the LASIK eye surgery is verified, I wanna do LASIK.
>>If LASIK eye surgery is verified, I wanna do it.
But It takes over ten years to verify safety.
>>But it takes over ten years to verify its safety.
So I have to wear glasses at least for 2~3 years from now.
>> So I have to wear glasses for at least 2-3 from now.
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