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I have watched many futuristic movies. That kind of movies show us unreality scenes such as flying car and transforming robots and advanced spaceship. Some people believe that it will be not happen in the future.
Because it need too high technique that human can not do to make transforming robots.
But I believe that in the future, we can make flying car. There are some reasons that it will be came true.
Firstly, technology has been advancing rapidly. For example, when I was young, I saw video communication in a futuristic movie. At that time it was impossible in reality life. But nowadays, it is very common to use video communication.so in someday we can see flying car.
Secondly, I think movie show us realizable future. In the future, the number of people will be gradually increasing and it will be caused some problem such as traffic jam, house shortage
People will try to resolve this problem by inventing alternative things like fly car, intelligent robots
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I have watched many futuristic movies.
>>> Correct.
That kind of movies show us unreality scenes such as flying car and transforming robots and advanced spaceship.
>>> Those kinds of unrealistic movies where cars fly, robots transform and spaceship fly in space.
Some people believe that it will be not happen in the future.
>>> Correct.
Because it need too high technique that human can not do to make transforming robots.
>>> This is because for that to happen, humans need a far more advance technology than transforming robots.
But I believe that in the future, we can make flying car.
>>> Although, I believe that in the future, we can make cars fly. That much is possible.
There are some reasons that it will be came true.
>>> Let me state my reasons for saying so.
Firstly, technology has been advancing rapidly.
>>> Correct.
For example, when I was young, I saw video communication in a futuristic movie.
>>> For example, when I was young, I saw a form of video communication in a futuristic movie.
At that time it was impossible in reality life.
>>> At that time it was thought to be impossible.
But nowadays, it is very common to use video communication.
>>> But nowadays, it has become very common to use gadgets for video communication.
so in someday we can see flying car.
>>> So it is not impossible to see flying cars in the future.
Secondly, I think movie show us realizable future.
>>> Secondly, I think movies show us a realistic future.
In the future, the number of people will be gradually increasing and it will be caused some problem such as traffic jam, house shortage.
>>> In the future, the number of people will be gradually increase and that will be cause some problems such as traffic jams and house shortages.
People will try to resolve this problem by inventing alternative things like fly car, intelligent robots
>>> People will try to resolve this problem by inventing alternative things like assembling flying cars and creating intelligent robots.
I absolutely believe that it must be done for our life.
>>> I absolutely believe that these are necessary in our life.
In conclusion, as long as people try to advance technology, driving a flying car will be come true in close future.
>>> In conclusion, as long as people continue to improve and build new technologies, driving a flying car will come true in the close future.
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I want to talk about old person I respect is my university professor Kim.
>>> I want to talk about an old person who I respect the most. His name is Professor Kim. He was one of my teachers when I was in the university.
Hi taught electronic circuit subject.
>>> He taught the electronic circuit subject.
When I was second years, I took his class.
>>> I was in my second year when I took his class.
This is first time to meet Kim.
>>> That was my first meeting with Professor Kim.
Actually, I don\'t like to study electronic circuit because it is difficult to understand theory and complicated mathematics.
>>> Actually, I didn\'t like to study electronic circuit because it was difficult for me to understand the theory, including those complicated mathematical formulas.
But Kim taught me this subject very easily with various materials.
>>> But this teacher taught me how easy the subject was by using various materials.
The reason I respect my professor is he show me his enthusiasm for this subject.
>>> One more reason why I respect Mr. [Name] is because of his enthusiasm in the class.
For example, he invited well known electronic scientist to speech about new electronic technology.
>>> For example, he invited well known electronic scientists to give a speech about new electronic technologies.
Sometime he advice me about how to getting a good job after graduating school.
>>> Sometimes, he advises me about how to get a good job after graduating school.
It was helped me to learn various knowledge and to interest my major.
>>> It helped me to acquire various knowledge and gain interest in my major.
~T. IRENE~
I have watched many futuristic movies.
>>> Correct.
That kind of movies show us unreality scenes such as flying car and transforming robots and advanced spaceship.
>>> Those kinds of unrealistic movies where cars fly, robots transform and spaceship fly in space.
Some people believe that it will be not happen in the future.
>>> Correct.
Because it need too high technique that human can not do to make transforming robots.
>>> This is because for that to happen, humans need a far more advance technology than transforming robots.
But I believe that in the future, we can make flying car.
>>> Although, I believe that in the future, we can make cars fly. That much is possible.
There are some reasons that it will be came true.
>>> Let me state my reasons for saying so.
Firstly, technology has been advancing rapidly.
>>> Correct.
For example, when I was young, I saw video communication in a futuristic movie.
>>> For example, when I was young, I saw a form of video communication in a futuristic movie.
At that time it was impossible in reality life.
>>> At that time it was thought to be impossible.
But nowadays, it is very common to use video communication.
>>> But nowadays, it has become very common to use gadgets for video communication.
so in someday we can see flying car.
>>> So it is not impossible to see flying cars in the future.
Secondly, I think movie show us realizable future.
>>> Secondly, I think movies show us a realistic future.
In the future, the number of people will be gradually increasing and it will be caused some problem such as traffic jam, house shortage.
>>> In the future, the number of people will be gradually increase and that will be cause some problems such as traffic jams and house shortages.
People will try to resolve this problem by inventing alternative things like fly car, intelligent robots
>>> People will try to resolve this problem by inventing alternative things like assembling flying cars and creating intelligent robots.
I absolutely believe that it must be done for our life.
>>> I absolutely believe that these are necessary in our life.
In conclusion, as long as people try to advance technology, driving a flying car will be come true in close future.
>>> In conclusion, as long as people continue to improve and build new technologies, driving a flying car will come true in the close future.
***************
I want to talk about old person I respect is my university professor Kim.
>>> I want to talk about an old person who I respect the most. His name is Professor Kim. He was one of my teachers when I was in the university.
Hi taught electronic circuit subject.
>>> He taught the electronic circuit subject.
When I was second years, I took his class.
>>> I was in my second year when I took his class.
This is first time to meet Kim.
>>> That was my first meeting with Professor Kim.
Actually, I don\'t like to study electronic circuit because it is difficult to understand theory and complicated mathematics.
>>> Actually, I didn\'t like to study electronic circuit because it was difficult for me to understand the theory, including those complicated mathematical formulas.
But Kim taught me this subject very easily with various materials.
>>> But this teacher taught me how easy the subject was by using various materials.
The reason I respect my professor is he show me his enthusiasm for this subject.
>>> One more reason why I respect Mr. [Name] is because of his enthusiasm in the class.
For example, he invited well known electronic scientist to speech about new electronic technology.
>>> For example, he invited well known electronic scientists to give a speech about new electronic technologies.
Sometime he advice me about how to getting a good job after graduating school.
>>> Sometimes, he advises me about how to get a good job after graduating school.
It was helped me to learn various knowledge and to interest my major.
>>> It helped me to acquire various knowledge and gain interest in my major.
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