(Homework)Can you name three jobs you can be good at?
학생이 쓴 원문
I spend much time to find my good job. i don\'t think about these points seriously.
Finally i found two jobs that i am good at.
First i am good at cleaning and tidying. before starting everything, i habitually must clean the places.
Second i am good at planning time schedule. It is my routine for beginning of work. as i said before, when my plan was delayed or stopped abruptly, i feel so frustrated and embarrassed.
But this is important for me to develop in my personality.
강사 첨삭
[이름],
Thank you for sharing! I really like how you described your strengths with specific habits; cleaning before starting and planning schedules. This shows that you are very organized and disciplined, which are excellent qualities for many jobs. Your writing also reflects self-awareness, because you recognize how delays affect your emotions and how that connects to your personality growth.
Please review the corrections. Remember that clear sentence structure and correct word choice make your ideas easier to follow.
~ Trixia
CONTENT:
1. I spend much time to find my good job. i don\'t think about these points seriously.
-- I spend much time trying to find a good job. I haven’t thought about these points seriously.
2. Finally i found two jobs that i am good at.
-- Finally, I found two jobs that I am good at.
3. First i am good at cleaning and tidying. before starting everything, i habitually must clean the places.
-- First, I am good at cleaning and tidying. Before starting anything, I habitually clean the place.
4. Second i am good at planning time schedule. It is my routine for beginning of work. as i said before, when my plan was delayed or stopped abruptly, i feel so frustrated and embarrassed.
-- Second, I am good at planning schedules. It is my routine before beginning work. As I said before, when my plan is delayed or stopped abruptly, I feel frustrated and embarrassed.
5. But this is important for me to develop in my personality.
-- But this is important for me to develop my personality.
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