Homework . Claire
학생이 쓴 원문
HOMEWORK:
What motivates you to learn English?
First, I have a goal to go to international middle school. I think going to international school is first step further to my dream. My dream is correspondent (news reporter) of BBC in UK. I want to work as a news reporter in BBC that reports the situation in Korea. I must learn English to achieve my dream of news reporter of BBC.
Second, when I saw Koran who speak English perfectly (like a native speaker) it motivate me too. I feel that I want to be like that person. Imagine myself being a someone who speaks English motivates me a lot.
Third, my rivals and enemies. When I see my rivals or enemies, I think I will be better. Probably because of a proud temper. In this kind of situation, my rivals and enemies influence a good parts to me.
After many efforts, learning English gives me pride. Right now it can be hard, but someday I think English will help me achieving my dream.
강사 첨삭
Hello Claire!
Great job today and your writing was very nice to read. Keep up the good work.
~~Teacher Kate
>>First, I have a goal to go to an international middle school.
I think going to international school is first step further to my dream.
>>I think going to an international school is the first step towards achieving my dream.
My dream is correspondent (news reporter) of BBC in UK.
>>My dream is to be a correspondent (news reporter) of BBC in the UK.
I want to work as a news reporter in BBC that reports the situation in Korea.
>>I want to work as a news reporter in BBC who reports the situation in Korea.
I must learn English to achieve my dream of news reporter of BBC.
>>I must learn English to achieve my dream of becoming a news reporter of BBC.
Second, when I saw Korean who speak English perfectly (like a native speaker) it motivate me too. I feel that I want to be like that person.
>>Second, when I see Koreans who speak English perfectly (like a native speaker) it motivates me too. I feel that I want to be like that person.
Imagine myself being a someone who speaks English motivates me a lot.
>>Imagining myself as someone who speaks English well motivates me a lot.
Third, my rivals and enemies.
Third, my rivals and enemies.
>>CORRECT.
When I see my rivals or enemies, I think I will be better.
>>CORRECT.
Probably because of a proud temper.
>>It\'s probably because of my pride.
In this kind of situation, my rivals and enemies influence a good parts to me.
>>In this kind of situation, my rivals and enemies influence the good parts of me.
After many efforts, learning English gives me pride.
After many efforts, learning English gives me pride.
>>After a lot of effort, learning English gives me pride.
Right now it can be hard, but someday I think English will help me achieving my dream.
>>Right now it can be hard, but someday I think English will help me in achieving my dream.
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