Homework: Compare the time you spend with your family when you were young and now that you’ve grown
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Homework:
Compare the time you spend with your family when you were young and now that you’ve grown up. Use at least 3 to 4 short paragraphs.
When I was young, I used to play soccer with my family. while doing it, I thought that my father is the most talented soccer player. But for now, My father is out of stamina, we don\'t play soccer anymore.
Instead of it, After I\'ve become grown-up. we sometimes go to watch movies, chewing popcorn or grilled squid. It is a little bit expensive, but sometimes, we\'re deserve to be luxury.
If I\'ve learned something from it, No matter what to do with, but the important thing is, We\'re having a good time together.
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Great sentence construction Jason! I understood what you were pointing out. Your ideas were clear and you were able to express yourself well. Please do remember that when you are starting a new sentence, start it with a capital letter. Please review the corrections here as well. Thank you very much! :)
>> Correct.
while doing it, I thought that my father is the most talented soccer player.
>> That time, I thought that my father was the most talented soccer player.
But for now, My father is out of stamina, we don\'t play soccer anymore.
>> But now, my father is out of stamina, we don\'t play soccer anymore.
Instead of it, After I\'ve become grown-up. we sometimes go to watch movies, chewing popcorn or grilled squid.
>> But now, my father is out of stamina, we don\'t play soccer anymore.
Instead of it, After I\'ve become grown-up. we sometimes go to watch movies, chewing popcorn or grilled squid.
>> Now that I\'ve grown up instead of playing soccer, we sometimes watch movies and eat popcorn or grilled squid.
It is a little bit expensive, but sometimes, we\'re deserve to be luxury.
>> It\'s a little bit expensive but we all deserve to be luxurious sometimes.
If I\'ve learned something from it, No matter what to do with, but the important thing is, We\'re having a good time together.
>> It\'s a little bit expensive but we all deserve to be luxurious sometimes.
If I\'ve learned something from it, No matter what to do with, but the important thing is, We\'re having a good time together.
>> I\'ve learned that it doesn\'t matter what I am doing, the important thing is that I have a good time and enjoy it.
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